Score: 6

"Good writing for this style."

submission: "TrncKlldThDncflr"[WiP] SSaB

date: December 17, 2009

As far as the composition for this style goes, this is quite appealing. I have nothing more to say there.

The mixing certainly needs work. The volumes seem off for this style.

-Starting with the reverse cymbal: I'd take the volume down a small increment (something comfortable for the ears) and if I could increase the pitch some more so there wasn't a low rumble for the cymbal (yuck), I'd go for that too.

-Bass synth: a tad too loud, take it down in volume.

-Bass kick: needs a compressor on it definitely. Can't even hear the kick drum as loud as I think it should be.

-Lead synths: perfect volume, nice.

-Rest of drums: way too quiet.

-Also, as far as panning goes, the panning is missing. Imagine a stage and where each sound is coming from according to what you think, and then pan according.

-I hope I have helped, if you have any questions, let me know!

-ImperfectDisciple

-I am also working on something, care to check it out?

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/296420

Score: 8

"Good starting structure"

submission: The Untraceable

date: December 17, 2009

I like the muted feel of this piece, it adds to the "Untraceable," mysterious feel of tracking a suspected individual down.

I don't know what kind of panning you have considered thus far, but some panning would do great for filling up the entire stereo space. I feel as though it's all in the center right now.

I don't know if there are drums right now. I hear a slight rhythm in the background. I think that is good for a part of the loop/song, whichever it comes out to be. I would start a slow, heavy drum beat at 0:27. If you are curious about that, let me know, I'd be glad to give you an idea as to what I mean. I just don't know how else to describe what I am thinking besides "slow, heavy drum beat."

-Good stuff so far, I like how it's shaping.

-ImperfectDisciple

I have a piece I am working on too, care to check it out?

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/296420

Score: 8

"Awesome!"

submission: Halcyon Lights

date: December 17, 2009

I feel like you have a insanely good intro here right now. From 0:00-0:12, I like the synth work. From 0:12 on, I feel like the lead synths are quite muddy. Maybe if that underlying harmony from one of the synths was put an octave higher? Either that, or put a harmony working in thirds above the lead synth you have now. If you don't know what I mean, lemmy know, and I can get you an example.

I am digging the sound between the bass synth and the kick drum. It is a nice balance, not too overwhelming, but it makes you want to groove. Top notch.

I feel like a syncopated string stab of some sort would work with this as well. Something that goes against the four on the floor, but makes the piece sound even more groovy.

If I were thinking beyond what you have so far (as far as what comes next), perhaps the next section of the piece would be calmer with a melodic lead taking over with a slightly different chord structure.

-I hope this sparks up some new ideas!

-ImperfectDisciple

-I have a work in progress that I'm interesting in hearing about, could you leave a review?

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/296420

Score: 10

"Transformers much?"

submission: Awake - Raven Song (preview)

date: December 16, 2009

I feel like this is what would happen if Linkin Park did dubstep, not sure though. I like where it is going, very nice :)

-ImperfectDisciple

-Could you perhaps review my newest demo, Hope?

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/296420

Score: 10

"Happy :)"

submission: Awake - Supernova

date: December 16, 2009

This is an amazing track. Then again, anytime I hear your stuff, I get extremely excited. Very awesome composition here. No other comments, keep it up :)

-ImperfectDisciple

Score: 10

"Sweet"

submission: xKore - Moments

date: December 16, 2009

Possibly the best bass I've ever heard on my headphones for the 4 months I've had them. :)

-ImperfectDisciple

Score: 10

"This is quite a MAD track."

submission: Mutual Assured Destruction DJT

date: December 11, 2009

Totally enjoyed this. I kinda want to find a club in Nashville that this would be played at. The drums were definitely a forte for me in this track. The diverse sound and rhythm were quite appealing. Nice stuff.

-ImperfectDisciple

Score: 10

"Cruisin'"

submission: Yurei

date: December 2, 2009

-The first thing that came to mind was this piece's ability to be in a racing game. Hearing stuff like this totally makes my day.

-Not as diverse as I hoped it to be, but honestly, it's still extremely diverse compared to the majority of dance that I hear, so props for that.

-Once again, an open soundscape, and it sounds great! The variety of tone and color is fascinating.

-I don't have much to say for this one. It's definitely thrilling. Some of the transitions reminded me of the band Family Force 5. Very intense piece. Keep it up!

-ImperfectDisciple-

Score: 9

"Chilltastic"

submission: Planet Seoul

date: December 2, 2009

-The diversity present in this piece is quite fascinating. This is definitely not your run of the mill electronic music. There is a broader variety, a vast spectrum of creative sound use.

-I wish the bass had more variety as far as supporting the chord structure. It seems as though the bass is riding on the root note of the chord most of the time. Why not dance around the chord structure? You have a piece in A minor with some blues stuff in there, perhaps on the A minor, throw the bass in the current rhythm into a pattern with more notes of the chord, like the C and E. The rhythm was awesome, I loved it, but I feel like more tonal support could come from the bass.

-The leads were amazing. This track reminded me of a game called Trackmania Nations. Very professional piece. Tons of variety, in the melodies and I also must mention the percussion. Top notch, keep it up!

-ImperfectDisciple-

Score: 8

"Sounds like you used a MOTIF?"

submission: Carol of the Bells (Remix)

date: November 27, 2009

I mean, I could be wrong, but it kinda sounds like some of the samples from there. MOTIFS are fun :)

Aside from that, I didn't feel like this was anything energizing as a remix. Nice sound and dynamics, but I still felt it wasn't an original remix, though I suppose that in itself could be an oxymoron.

Neato...